• Demonstrate the ability to approach writing as a recursive process that requires substantial revision of drafts for content, organization, and clarity (global revision), as well as editing and proofreading (local revision).
  • Be able to integrate their ideas with those of others using summary, paraphrase, quotation, analysis, and synthesis of relevant sources.
  • Employ techniques of active reading, critical reading, and informal reading response for inquiry, learning, and thinking.
  • Be able to critique their own and others’ work by emphasizing global revision early in the writing process and local revision later in the process.
  • Document their work using appropriate conventions (MLA).
  • Control sentence-level error (grammar, punctuation, spelling).

2. Draft:

Final:

3. Good Peer Comments

4.

Outcome 1: I noticed that the most significant changes made in my work were within Barclay’s formula paragraphs. Mostly changing the evidence, it seemed accurate to add more to each quote I had. The descriptions then added much more to the work. This was suggested by my peers in my second paper.

Outcome 2: At first, writing about my own thoughts was unnatural. I could see the improvements within myself really being able to position myself in a text and allowing my ideas to flow freely. This really was noticeable in my second major paper this semester. I would make sure to include my position in every place I got.

Outcome 3: My understanding in this short 5 pages of Coates writing is shown often. I like to show my understanding by pondering over whatever is written and will say that through writing. I do like to question the texts, but not as someone may think. I take a different approach where I question the people who would deny the truth behind the text. I improved with making relationships over the semester and in these annotations I did so by relating the amount of siblings Clyde Ross had. When it comes to challenging the text, I did so by asking the simple question of how much a horse would’ve been worth for a white person.