1.  In “The Coddling” by Lukianoff and Haidt, they make an argument to stop protecting students from trigger warnings – “But vindictive protectiveness teaches students to think in a very different way. It prepares them poorly for professional life” (para 8). I completely disagree with this quote because most of the people who are being protected from these sensitive subjects have already had to deal with the sensitivities outside of college. To improve on introducing the quote, I added a signal phrase. This improves upon the introduction because it isn’t just showing what the authors say, but rather, shows that they are stating something that could be up for discussion.
  2. In Carol Dweck’s “The power of believing that you can improve” she insists that people with a fixed mindset feel as if, “their intelligence had been up for judgment” (Dweck para. 2). I believe what Dweck is saying is that people with this mindset have a hard time changing their perspective and agreeing to something new. The improvement made to this section was incorporating the short quote into my words to create a sentence. This helps because the text now flows much smoother.
  3. In Lukianoff and Haidt’s “The Coddling” they emphasize “[To not] teach students what to think; teach them how to think” (Coddling para. 7). This quote says that students need to engage in beliefs that may challenge their own. They need to be able to understand both sides to then make a clear decision on which side they take. This will allow for a more critical way of thinking. The signal phrase used creates a more dramatic entrance to the quote. I also decided to change the beginning of the quote by using brackets and allowing the sentence to flow better.